after seeing
my marksheet, many people have asked,
what went wrong with the essay?
I wrote Essay on 'Are We a Soft State'
and after the mains exam, I had wrote the brief outline of my essay on indianofficer forum.
(click me to see it)
1. initially i left spaces to draw diagrams and cycles but then i ran out of time so couldn't draw them.
2. i ran out of time so i couldn't write the internal softness part in much detail.
3. i forgot to mention the
Kandahar &
Rubiya hostage situation (which rang my mind after reading the Indian Express of the same day and Bengal's home Secretary's remark on yes we are a soft state.)
I had pointed out Nehru's NAM + Panchsheel policy for external softness and Faulty Federalism for Internal Softness, I guess may be the professor did not agree with that.
I got a tip from anonymous person.
I read the points you had included in your essay on the indianofficer's forum. I am not sure myself, but I think your low score in essay can be attributed to your misinterpretation of the term "Soft Power". This term soft power was coined by a Harvard Professor and its meaning and connotations can be found at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Soft_power . I hope it helps you in someway.
^^ thanks for that. Well, in my essay, I had listed the advantages of being a soft power like getting nuke deal with US without signing the NPT / CTBT etc.
The question of Soft Power was asked in GS paper 2 on the day before Essay Paper and I had answered it. but I didn't elaborate the soft power concept separately in essay because I thought that the main subject of this essay is 'Are we a soft state' so if i go in length about soft power concept I would run out of time. (i did run out of time and couldn't write many things on India's softness in internal affairs) anyways I thought about my essay and It occurred to me that ...
Final Thoughts on the Low marks in Essay
many people would have wrote almost the same things like I did so mine was just another random average quality essay for the examiner. +I forgot to mention
Kandahar Hostage situation so I shouldn't expect huge marks for it, but still 20/200 is a way too harsh punishment for forgetting Kandahar and it wasn't extremely pathetic essay otherwise.
But then again if he had given me suppose 50 or 60 or 70 marks - even then I wasn't going to qualify for interview because my score is not good in GS or in Pub.Ad's paper1.
Some other related questions by other people
How many words did you write in the Essay?
-vipul pandey
I think I wrote about 2200 words.
did you answer all the questions of paper 1 and 2
-vipul pandey
for my optional subjects, yes I did answered the required questions.
for Gs- i couldn't answer many questions.
R u planning to write it again this yr or will you take this as a rest year and be ferociously ready for the next yr's new pattern.
-Mav
yes I'm going to appear for 2010's exam.